Below is the content from a real-life resume review of a client I will be working with after the Holidays. While I didn't include the resume for privacy reasons, this is what I sent this client. This gives you the opportunity to see the type of advice you could receive from a resume review.
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Resume Review Notes:
Thanks for the information and the resume. Here is some feedback and a price quote:
1. The first thing I think is:
A. This is really busy. There is a lot of stuff here, which can be good, but it's hard to read because of the graphics, table-formatted info, underlining, some bold, some italics, etc. When I write resumes, I like to say more with less. Meaning, I try to get as much info as possible across, but in a concise manner. I use a different format that allows the resume to "breathe" a little more and that bolds key items in the resume. The bolding is effective because most recruiters scan resumes first, read them second. If they see things they like they go back and read from top to bottom.
The design is not bad, it actually is a nice job organizing everything, I just think it's a little too much graphics and a little busy.
B. The second thing I think is - you have some great skills, experience and background. However, what you have listed is more like a career biography. While that is what a resume seems like, and partially is, I tell clients a resume is a marketing tool that quickly tells the employer you have the skills they need for a specific job. What that means is, again, I would say more, by saying less, and create a resume that could be easily tailored to each job you apply for with some minor tweaks and insertion of language related to those jobs.
Some other thoughts:
The profile section, I always use a profile section. However, I like to gear that towards key terms related to the job you are applying for. I like to see a job description and tailor the profile section to use key terms/words that are in the job description, then back them up with a proof of result - an accomplishment. I think some of what is in the profile would be used here, some could be moved to a section at the bottom of the resume I call Additional Information and some could be rearranged with key words related to the job description added - and bolded.
Those are good soft skills, but employers like to see results-oriented language. All of the info here is great to talk about an interview. However, unfortunately, employers expect these in employees nowadays. So, again, it comes back to showing job-related skills/results. The top portion of the resume should show achievement/succes that shows you've done what they need in the position they are hiring for. I would likely use some of those strengths in an additional information section, or as an add-in in the cover letter.
The fact you are about to start your education toward your Masters Degree could be better utilized higher in the resume, such as in the profile. A simple bullet could be added:
- * Experience backed by Bachelor of Arts in Organizational Management and Leadership; pursuing Masters of Business Administration starting June 2013, Hamline University
At this stage of your career I would move the rest of the education down to page 2. If you are entry-level with no experience, put education at the top. In this case you have some experience, so it should be moved down, but referenced briefly in the profile.
The list is good, but again, I would move towards the bottom at this point. I only list technical skills high if they are in an IT-related position, for example.
In this section, it talks about a lot of the things you did, but not the results of what you did.
For example, you list:
• Manage relationship management team technology access for the United States
An employer would ask - what is the result of this? If you did that, what did it do for the company? We would need to try and show that in the bullet points. Try to come up with results-oriented language for each bullet point. It's not possible for all but can be a big help. Show them how what you did helped, created results, added money, generated revenue, improved processes, etc.
Also, throughout you have some awards, which are good to add. Those could be a possible profile-related item pending on what else is added.
The professional affiliations listing is good.
So, after saying all of this, I believe you have a lot of good stuff but could rework some things to focus on the above information I added above. I'd be happy to help you achieve this for a fee $150. That would include a new resume and cover letter. If you signed up and paid via PayPal to get started, I would then send you a resume revision document that helps you possibly come up with additional successes/achievements or details. I would send a few sample resumes to see examples of final resumes, related to what I talked about here, and I would send a good resume writing article that helps you think of achievement/success in terms of gathering your career info.
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Thanks for contacting me, I hope this helps.